[Saemunder]

I don't pretend to even be good at writing so it's hard to pinpoint exactly what is brilliant or not especially if I think I could not have done better. I was hoping that in the meantime the brain would work and I'd be able to express it properly or more accurately. Your story Daishi, with the boat and dragon, I read all the way through without struggling to find a desire to read it. So it played well in my mind but there is something there that makes it feel...perhaps the right word would be incomplete. Perhaps because that scene sets a good idea for what is going on but lacks what feels like the person the story is focused around doing much. Kinda like a cutscene he's just there taking in the details, but that happens plenty of times in books because it's not just that one part we read that tells the story but the whole book so there are parts that while much is going on it still is meh when taken out of context. Anyhow that's the limit of what my feeble brain can come up with for what I wanted to add about that story. Stupid brain.